Wednesday, October 31, 2012

'For Those With Eyes to See'

'For Those with Eyes to See'
by Troy Blackford


Magdalene Palmer felt slightly miffed. For her, that was saying a lot: like you or I saying we were royally pissed. Magdalene Palmer wasn’t that type of person. On the kinds of terrible days that make people like us punch walls, she jogs down to the park and feeds the ducks. She couldn’t recall the last time she had felt mildly peeved, let alone slightly miffed.

But she was peeved now. A set of ceramic craft eyes--usually referred to by non-crafters as ‘googly eyes’--she had ordered from an online shop weeks ago still hadn’t arrived. Magdalene had waited one extra week over the seller’s maximum shipping time before deciding to write. Magdalene selected this woman, who handcrafted each eye, out of a large pool of potential suppliers on the basis of her many positive online reviews. Her customers all insisted this woman couldn’t be beat by any other eye-maker on the market.


On the basis of this merchant’s customer service reputation, Magdalene expected her polite e-mail to elicit an instantaneous response brimming with apologies and packed with assurances. No such e-mail ever came, nor did she receive any response whatsoever, nor to several further messages. As weeks wore on, Magdalene’s confusion coalesced into the mild form of displeasure that counted, for her, as ‘fury.’


Only one choice remained: public shaming.


Will this be a smart course of action, or will Magdalene regret her negative feedback? Find out in the short story collection 'For Those With Eyes to See' in Kindle and Paperback!



24 comments:

  1. Hook, line and Sinker...Loved it! I was reeled in and I laughed at the end! ~Bravo!

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  2. So spooky!! I'll never look at googly eyes without a shiver again!

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  3. Haha! I thoroughly enjoyed this. The whole time I kept thinking the heroine was having a dream. Perfect Halloween story. Creepy with a humorous ending.

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  4. Bwaa ha ha!

    Loved it! I'll never look at googly eyes the same way again... 0_0

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  5. Really liked this. Spooky and funny.

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  6. Awww...Liked very much, but the truly killer ending would have been to cut it at "wait 12 hours..." LOL

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  7. Certainly going to think more than twice about giving any kind of negative feedback ever again!

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  8. This was a GREAT story, Troy! I saw the link to it on Twitter and decided to come check it out. I'm so glad I did! Excellent buildup of suspense, strong character development, and funny ending. I loved the SNL reference, LOL. Amazing work!

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  9. Definitely weird but very entertaining, LOL. Couldn't help but think of Christopher Walken's SNL skit.

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  10. A very entertaining story, Troy!
    Does it make me think twice about giving anyone a bad review on an on-line shopping website? No!
    Will i be giving you a bad review? Hell, no!
    I think an added shock factor to the end of this story would be to use an animated .GIF to show a pair of jiggling googly eyes.
    THAT would be a pant-wetting closer!

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  11. Bravo! A consistent style and good pacing. A fantastic quick read! Thanks for sharing! :)

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  12. Oh, my. I don't think I'll be visiting any craft stores any time soon. Googly eyes! Oh, my!

    One of my favorite lines: a nigh-on-instantaneous e-mail brimming with apologies

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  13. I was just not expecting this but it was FANTASTIC!

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  14. Exquisitely woven story. And the ending was something I empathized with.

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  15. You are one crazy cat. Loved it and will soon put all googly eyes in a locked box. ;)

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  16. Fun. Liked the tension and dramatic irony.

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  18. Scary but loved it. On an unrelated note, are you in the market for some goggly eyes?

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  19. It was a GREAT STORY! Best story ever!!! Really, Troy, the best, I loved it!

    Please don't hurt me. Don't need a death of a thousand paper cuts tonight. :(

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